my sad attempt at still life

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my sad attempt at still life

Postby redline on Wed Mar 09, 2005 1:28 pm

yeah more titled image ahoy!
well it was a bw class and the mf camera had ruined two cable releases i tought i'll pull out the d70 and to realzie that the mf tripod doesn't fit the d70 mounting....don't things ever work out for me:X
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Postby xerubus on Wed Mar 09, 2005 1:30 pm

i think you've got the idea right... but the piece which you are focusing on needs to be tack sharp... otherwise the story doesn't work.

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Postby Glen on Wed Mar 09, 2005 1:38 pm

Redline, glad to see you haven't lost the trademark tilt :wink:
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Postby redline on Wed Mar 09, 2005 1:38 pm

yeah the hand holding didn't help out too well. i hope the 120 film developed out ok.
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Hi

Postby yeocsa on Wed Mar 09, 2005 2:19 pm

I could not make out what the primary subject. Perhaps you can consider put the black "King" in sharp focus and surround it with attacking pieces - blurry white pieces ... like in a check fashion.

You could also add in a white attacking piece (within DOF) showing the fingers of the opponents moving the piece to an attacking position.

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Postby sirhc55 on Wed Mar 09, 2005 2:21 pm

Mark is spot on Redline - but nice attempt :D
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Postby Deano on Wed Mar 09, 2005 3:56 pm

Redline,

It must be difficult to use that well practised panning technique of yours will subjects that don't move.

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Postby thaddeus on Wed Mar 09, 2005 9:03 pm

interesting shot
are the pieces on a board? as soon as i see chess pieces, i try to work out what the next move should be, but this doesn't look to be on a board
i like yeosca's idea of putting the fingers of an opponent in to add tension
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