I don't normally comment on this style of shot, as I just don't have something useful to add usually...
But in this post, you've taken the time and effort to show your setup - most don't bother - and that's a great addition to what you're sharing. For those of us that don't do this sort of thing, an insight into setup/equipment/etc is invaluable - thanks
I quite like both of the shots -
I am not sure on the pose in the first one I think though - her left arm looks cut off to me - the pose looks a little un-natural - my mind says her arm should be forward more rather than behind her. Not necessarily in front, but not behind. I like the lighting and everything else about it though.
The second one - don't have a critique, other than to say it looks like she's been caught up to no good (there is an element of surprise/shock in her gaze).
Thanks again for sharing the setup - makes this post much more than just a showpiece