My attepmt at touching up an image

Hello everyone, if you had viewed my earlier topic in the week it had a few wedding images. Well i have had some time to touch my favourite up. Bellow i have attached the original and the newly touched up version, i took on board everyones coments especially about the magnetta which was quite dominant on the bride and groom. i have tried to adjust those levels and have also made a few other changes. Can you let me know what you think of my re work?
thanks for looking.
Orignal Image as shot on camera:

My First attempt at crop and touch up: (from previous post)

My Newly attempt at touching up the image and crop.

thanks for looking.
Orignal Image as shot on camera:

My First attempt at crop and touch up: (from previous post)

My Newly attempt at touching up the image and crop.
