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Last night shots

Postby krpolak on Fri Jul 29, 2005 9:40 pm

Playing with shapes and colour. Comments and impressions welcome!

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Postby Sheetshooter on Fri Jul 29, 2005 9:47 pm

Krystian,

Well seen and well captured.

With regard to the yellow and orange shot I feel I might have tried to place the division between the colours on the golden mean - this would have reduced the intrusion of the stairs also. A slight adjustment of height might have been interesting too so that the lower horizontal line on the orange wall became one with the same line on the yellow OR became further separated.

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Postby Matt. K on Fri Jul 29, 2005 10:52 pm

Some interesting abstracts. Strong shapes and colours. These are much more difficult to see and do then the old 'faded paint' on the wall stuff. Looking forward to seeing more of these types of images.
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Postby krpolak on Fri Jul 29, 2005 11:39 pm

-->Sheetshooter

You are right with lower, horizontal lines on the wall. I didn't spot that :-)

I am not sure about 'hidding' stairs. Now it gives ballans to the door entrance. Left-right, first plan-second plan. Possibly I could pronounce them even more making similar in colour and shade to lighter wall.

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> Looking forward to seeing more of these types of images.

Some oldish, same style photos:


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Postby wendellt on Sat Jul 30, 2005 2:10 am

Krystian
you have a great eye for detail, composition and colour
the 'oldish' shot set is fantastic, can't find anything in them to improve upon, so congratulations is in order.
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Postby Sheetshooter on Sat Jul 30, 2005 5:43 am

Krystian,

You have a very particular way of seeing the world and seem to regularly achieve things that most others can only aspire to. Far be it for me to argue with you over personal aspects of composition or framing so please don't take what I am about to say as argument but as points for consideration.

At the remote distance from the original location that I sit with only your photo as indication of what might be there I just feel that 4 step risers and treads would be a neater diagonal in the lower left corner and still get the point across rather than the present 4 steps and landing which seem a little asymmetrical at present. This would allow the division between orange and yellow to move closer to the harmony found in the golden mean. It might also allow the curved skirting of the yellow wall to make a stronger contrast with the planar orange wall. Who knows, perhaps there were unattractive elements just out of frame to the right which are best left unincluded but if it were feasible I just feel it would balance better. And being a picture essentially all about design, I think balance is a significant factor. For me (and it's not my picture, I admit) the practicality of the steps and door is totally ancillary to the design elements and simply add a tad of function to the form. At the angle that we see the door we know by convention that it is a point of ingress/egress but its real strength is as a design element which breaks the expanse of the yellow wall.

Having said all of that your mastery of this seeking out of pattern is to be applauded and I hope that what we are seeing here are shots which may in time make it as a POTW.

Do you work in design or architecture?
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Postby Sheetshooter on Sat Jul 30, 2005 5:56 am

Krystian,

The subsequent shots are a delight also - very impressive.

Did you consider, however, cropping the top of the chair shot to remove the faint secondary venetian blind light-pattern? I find that it detracts somewhat rather than empowering the dialogue between the other light pattern and chair. It is a difficult choice, I know, because the mortar line of the upper course of stone is a very positive element and it does provide some air around the main motif. Just bloody unfortunate that that car was parked out there reflecting the sun from a second point.

Maybe it is a job for Healing-Brush Man and his mighty powers of cloning!

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Postby nito on Sat Jul 30, 2005 11:09 am

krpolak, I like all of the shots except the pole and sky one. Excellent capture of colour and contrast.
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Postby Sheetshooter on Sat Jul 30, 2005 11:15 am

Nito,

Care to elaborate on what it is with the pole shot that doesn't meet wth your favour? Or is it just a 'feeling in your bones' sort of thing?

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Postby nito on Sat Jul 30, 2005 11:19 am

Sure, there is not enough colour to attract my eyes. The other shots had multiple bright and contrasting colours that draw your attention to the image. The pole one didnt do that for me. :D
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Postby the foto fanatic on Sat Jul 30, 2005 11:20 am

Great pix, all of them.

This sort of photographic art looks so easy to achieve when it is as good as this, but it is significantly difficult.

Congratulations. :D
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Postby Sheetshooter on Sat Jul 30, 2005 11:22 am

Thanks Nito,

You know, curiosity killed the cat and I make myself a likely target also.
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Postby sirhc55 on Sat Jul 30, 2005 11:51 am

Abstracts that work, not because of a camera, but through the eye of the person with his finger on the shutter button - well done :D
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Postby krpolak on Sat Jul 30, 2005 11:49 pm

-->Sheetshooter

Thanks for your extensive comment. To be honest I hoped to get to this point. Well, I read your thoughts and find, that I must reshoot this one. Result is below:

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What I can see, using rule of third helps this image. Left wall becomes less intrusive, nicely framing yellow into square. Possibly even croping extra mils from the left would do well. And as you said this image is more about design so relation between stairs and doors is second plan, I agree.

Going back to the chairs shot. Yep, it could be good to clean up this extra bit of reflection. Just being to lazy to do it hehe ;-) I would leave format of this photo as it is. I like its spacing.

>Do you work in design or architecture?

I do mostly 3d graphics, quite a bit architectural visualisation.

>nito

Possibly street pole shot looks a bit 'pale' comparing to others. However I really like this shot. Somehow it remainds me an alien or welcoming person :)

Thanks to all guys for your comments!

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Postby Sheetshooter on Sun Jul 31, 2005 12:05 am

All your work I have seen so far is nothing short of marvellous Kristian,

And I really do love this yellow and orange shot - I could envisage it in (INSIDE) magazine or Monument (as local mags go.)

There is such a strong tradition of this style in Europe - especially in art photography circles.

If you have not seen his photographs previously, might I suggest that you seek out Sean Scully. He has a book out entitled THE COLOUR OF TIME [Publisher: Steidl ISBN: 3-88243-961-0]. Scully is a painter who works in a style reminiscent of Mark Rothko but he also makes photographs and he has travelled the world and found subjects in real life that represent Rothko's panels of colour. Not exactly in the same vein as your work but it may prove inspirational.

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Postby leek on Sun Jul 31, 2005 9:22 am

Great shots Krystian... It was worth reshooting... The alignment of the lines has improved the shot.

I too think that the stairs add to the composition, but I would probably be tempted to fix up the staining on the steps in PS.
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Postby Sheetshooter on Sun Jul 31, 2005 11:41 am

John,

I have to agree in this instance: the stained risers are not a pretty addition to the pristine perfection of the vertical surfaces.

Shooting for architects, as I do, invariably the places are brand new and dazzlingly unspoiled. Frankly, it gets very boring. I seek retribution in personal projects where my fascination is with the patina of use and the broken linearity of structural decay. If what we were talking about was just the sign of use from a torrent of footsteps I would possibly argue in favour of leaving well enough alone. In this case however it would appear more likely to be a fault in construction and so best gotten rid of.

Moral of the story is that each case deserves individual reasoning and appropriate action based on that resoning.

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